Subject: Re: Edits attached
From: <[email-masked]>
To: "Miranda, Luis" <[email-masked]>
Cc: Hilary Rosen <[email-masked]>, "Walsh, Tom" <[email-masked]>, "Kate Houghton" <[email-masked]>, "Bonosky, Garret" <[email-masked]>, "Guerra, Liana" <[email-masked]>, Tracie Pough <[email-masked]>, "Banfill, Ryan" <[email-masked]>, Anita Dunn <[email-masked]>, Leah Daughtry <[email-masked]>, April Mellody <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 20 May 2016 13:43:37 -0400

Guys, this has nothing to do with the rollout. Hilary was suggesting that we shorten the speech into a Medium post. April and Leah were not in our meeting yesterday but the Kirk and Dean suggestion was related to having them jointly sign an op-ed or Medium post explaining what does and does not happen at the Dem Convention. 

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> On May 20, 2016, at 1:32 PM, Miranda, Luis <[email-masked]> wrote:
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> Plus Leah and April who are running the roll out. 
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> From: Hilary Rosen <[email-masked]> 
> Date: 05/20/2016 13:25 (GMT-05:00) 
> To: "Miranda, Luis" <[email-masked]>, "Walsh, Tom" <[email-masked]>, Kate Houghton <[email-masked]> 
> Cc: "Bonosky, Garret" <[email-masked]>, Debbie Wasserman Schultz <[email-masked]>, "Guerra, Liana" <[email-masked]>, Tracie Pough <[email-masked]>, "Banfill, Ryan" <[email-masked]>, Anita Dunn <[email-masked]> 
> Subject: RE: Edits attached 
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> Where are we with the Paul Kirk howard Dan ideas?  I ask because I think this speech could be shortened a bit and published on Medium a few hours after she gives it.
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> From: Miranda, Luis [mailto:[email-masked]] 
> Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 1:21 PM
> To: Walsh, Tom <[email-masked]>; Kate Houghton <[email-masked]>
> Cc: Bonosky, Garret <[email-masked]>; Debbie Wasserman Schultz <[email-masked]>; Guerra, Liana <[email-masked]>; Tracie Pough <[email-masked]>; Banfill, Ryan <[email-masked]>; Anita Dunn <[email-masked]>; Hilary Rosen <[email-masked]>
> Subject: RE: Edits attached
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> Got it. I'll print. 
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> From: Walsh, Tom
> Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 1:18 PM
> To: Kate Houghton
> Cc: Bonosky, Garret; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Miranda, Luis; Guerra, Liana; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
> Subject: Edits attached
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> From: Kate Houghton 
> Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 1:14 PM
> To: Walsh, Tom
> Cc: Bonosky, Garret; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Miranda, Luis; Guerra, Liana; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
> Subject: Re: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
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> Ready to print. 
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> On May 20, 2016, at 12:59 PM, Walsh, Tom <[email-masked]> wrote:
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> Got it – working on it
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> From: Bonosky, Garret 
> Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:59 PM
> To: Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Miranda, Luis; Walsh, Tom
> Cc: Guerra, Liana; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
> Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
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> Attached are:
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> 1.     ‘DWS ASDC Speech – START WITH THIS’ à use this as your base document to edit
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> 2.     ‘DWS ASDC Speech tp edits’ PDF à these are the Chairwoman’s edits à Tom make these first
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> 3.     ‘DWS ASDC Speech – SKD edits’ à Tom these are the edits that Anita and Hilary sent over; make these last
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> Tom à after making the edits please reply all and send on this thread.
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> Kate à please print in Philadelphia (2 copies) and we will do speech prep when we arrive.
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> From: Debbie Wasserman Schultz [mailto:[email-masked]] 
> Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:48 PM
> To: Miranda, Luis; Bonosky, Garret; Walsh, Tom
> Cc: Guerra, Liana; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
> Subject: Re: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
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> Yes, we are.
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> Sent from my BlackBerry 10 smartphone.
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> From: Miranda, Luis
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> Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:38 PM
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> To: Bonosky, Garret; Walsh, Tom
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> Cc: Guerra, Liana; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
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> Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
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> Biggest thing for me is that we should drop the paragraph on the Egypt Air crash entirely. 
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> From: Bonosky, Garret
> Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:34 PM
> To: Walsh, Tom
> Cc: Guerra, Liana; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Miranda, Luis; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
> Subject: Re: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
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> Tom - Also have additional changes Anita sent; I will send over shortly, make the chairwoman's changes now and then make the Anita edits I send shortly. 
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> On May 20, 2016, at 12:26 PM, Walsh, Tom <[email-masked]> wrote:
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> Thanks, working on it
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: Guerra, Liana 
> Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:25 PM
> To: Bonosky, Garret; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Walsh, Tom; Miranda, Luis
> Cc: Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
> Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
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> Attached is the word doc
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: Bonosky, Garret 
> Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:24 PM
> To: Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Walsh, Tom; Miranda, Luis
> Cc: Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen; Guerra, Liana
> Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
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> Looping in Liana who has the most recent edited word document. 
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> Liana will send to Tom; Tom will edit (with the notes from document attached to this email) and then will send to Kate who will print on the ground on Philadelphia 
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: [email-masked] [mailto:[email-masked]] 
> Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:07 PM
> To: Bonosky, Garret; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Walsh, Tom; Miranda, Luis
> Cc: Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
> Subject: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
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> Here is revised draft with my edits. Tom, Luis and Ryan, I want to review with you why the speech had to be dramatically edited so we are on the same page going forward. Thanks for everyone's help. 
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> Annotation Summary for: 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
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