Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
From: "Bonosky, Garret" <[email-masked]>
To: Debbie Wasserman Schultz <[email-masked]>, Tracie Pough <[email-masked]>, "Banfill, Ryan" <[email-masked]>, Kate Houghton <[email-masked]>, "Walsh, Tom" <[email-masked]>, "Miranda, Luis" <[email-masked]>
Cc: Anita Dunn <[email-masked]>, Hilary Rosen <[email-masked]>, "Guerra, Liana" <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 20 May 2016 09:24:15 -0700

Looping in Liana who has the most recent edited word document. 

Liana will send to Tom; Tom will edit (with the notes from document attached to this email) and then will send to Kate who will print on the ground on Philadelphia 

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Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:07 PM
To: Bonosky, Garret; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Walsh, Tom; Miranda, Luis
Cc: Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
Subject: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated

Here is revised draft with my edits. Tom, Luis and Ryan, I want to review with you why the speech had to be dramatically edited so we are on the same page going forward. Thanks for everyone's help. 

Annotation Summary for: 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated

Page 2, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 4, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 4, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 4, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: elect a Democrat, once again. 

Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 8, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: for whom

Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 8, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: it

Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 8, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: originally, 

Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 9, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 9, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: happened?

Page 9, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 10, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 11, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 12, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 14, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 14, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 14, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: And Hillary declared it a terrorist act yesterday too. 

Page 15, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 15, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: gloss over

Page 15, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 17, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 20, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 20, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: strengthened our

Page 20, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 22, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 22, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: then

Page 22, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 22, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 23, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: get our work done

Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 23, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: heard

Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 23, Typewriter (Red):

Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 23, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: the

Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 24, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 24, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 24, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: Dangerous

Page 26, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 27, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 27, Typewriter (Red):
  Comment: of

Page 27, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 28, Line Drawing (Red)

Page 30, Line Drawing (Red)

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