Subject: RE: Edits attached
From: "Miranda, Luis" <[email-masked]>
To: Tracie Pough <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 20 May 2016 13:55:23 -0700

No, this is just a request to turn her speech into a Medium post. It's just good party building stuff, nothing controversial, so I hadn't flagged it for Amy. This is separate from the platform drafting committee stuff, which I'm leaving entirely to the convention team.

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From: Tracie Pough
Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 4:53 PM
To: Miranda, Luis
Subject: Re: Edits attached

Luis- is any aware of what's going on here?

- TP

On May 20, 2016, at 4:36 PM, Miranda, Luis <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>> wrote:

Different audience. Excerpts are super short. Medium gives space to add graphics and make it more colorful illustration of everything we've done. Can be bolstered with today's polling on Democratic unity.

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From: Domino, Cate
Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 4:35 PM
To: Banfill, Ryan
Cc: Miranda, Luis; Compton, Matt; Simonds, Tessa; Walsh, Tom; Tracie Pough
Subject: Re: Edits attached

I just saw that you're planning on releasing excerpts from the speech - what are you hoping to accomplish in the Medium post that won't be accomplished by circulating excerpts?

On May 20, 2016, at 2:14 PM, Banfill, Ryan <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>> wrote:

Thanks Cate.

Just to be clear: This is about unity and pulling together to support our nominee and defeating Donald Trump.

No Nevada, please. Nevada is over.

Once we get a draft, please send it to me and Tracie for review.

Sent from my iPhone

On May 20, 2016, at 2:07 PM, Domino, Cate <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>> wrote:

Can do – I’m assuming she’s mostly interested in the parts that address Nevada and her own neutrality, right? When are you hoping to publish?

Also adding Tessa, for awareness.

From: "Miranda, Luis" <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>
Date: Friday, May 20, 2016 at 1:42 PM
To: dominoc <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>, "Compton, Matt" <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>
Cc: "Walsh, Tom" <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>, "Banfill, Ryan" <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>
Subject: Fwd: Edits attached

Hi Cate, the Chair would like this shortened and turned into Medium post.

Sent via the Samsung GALAXY S®4, an AT&T 4G LTE smartphone

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From: "Walsh, Tom" <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>
Date: 05/20/2016 13:18 (GMT-05:00)
To: Kate Houghton <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>
Cc: "Bonosky, Garret" <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>, Debbie Wasserman Schultz <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>, "Miranda, Luis" <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>, "Guerra, Liana" <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>, Tracie Pough <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>, "Banfill, Ryan" <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>, Anita Dunn <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>, Hilary Rosen <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>>
Subject: Edits attached

From: Kate Houghton
Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 1:14 PM
To: Walsh, Tom
Cc: Bonosky, Garret; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Miranda, Luis; Guerra, Liana; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
Subject: Re: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated

Ready to print.

On May 20, 2016, at 12:59 PM, Walsh, Tom <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>> wrote:
Got it – working on it

From: Bonosky, Garret
Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:59 PM
To: Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Miranda, Luis; Walsh, Tom
Cc: Guerra, Liana; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated

Attached are:

1.     ‘DWS ASDC Speech – START WITH THIS’ --> use this as your base document to edit

2.     ‘DWS ASDC Speech tp edits’ PDF --> these are the Chairwoman’s edits --> Tom make these first

3.     ‘DWS ASDC Speech – SKD edits’ --> Tom these are the edits that Anita and Hilary sent over; make these last

Tom--> after making the edits please reply all and send on this thread.

Kate--> please print in Philadelphia (2 copies) and we will do speech prep when we arrive.

From: Debbie Wasserman Schultz [mailto:[email-masked]]
Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:48 PM
To: Miranda, Luis; Bonosky, Garret; Walsh, Tom
Cc: Guerra, Liana; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
Subject: Re: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated

Yes, we are.

Sent from my BlackBerry 10 smartphone.
From: Miranda, Luis
Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:38 PM
To: Bonosky, Garret; Walsh, Tom
Cc: Guerra, Liana; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated

Biggest thing for me is that we should drop the paragraph on the Egypt Air crash entirely.

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From: Bonosky, Garret
Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:34 PM
To: Walsh, Tom
Cc: Guerra, Liana; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Miranda, Luis; Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
Subject: Re: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
Tom - Also have additional changes Anita sent; I will send over shortly, make the chairwoman's changes now and then make the Anita edits I send shortly.

Garret Bonosky
Deputy Director
Office of the Chair
Democratic National Committee

On May 20, 2016, at 12:26 PM, Walsh, Tom <[email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]>> wrote:
Thanks, working on it

-----Original Message-----
From: Guerra, Liana
Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:25 PM
To: Bonosky, Garret; Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Walsh, Tom; Miranda, Luis
Cc: Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated

Attached is the word doc

-----Original Message-----
From: Bonosky, Garret
Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:24 PM
To: Debbie Wasserman Schultz; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Walsh, Tom; Miranda, Luis
Cc: Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen; Guerra, Liana
Subject: RE: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated

Looping in Liana who has the most recent edited word document.

Liana will send to Tom; Tom will edit (with the notes from document attached to this email) and then will send to Kate who will print on the ground on Philadelphia

-----Original Message-----
From: [email-masked]<mailto:[email-masked]> [mailto:[email-masked]]
Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:07 PM
To: Bonosky, Garret; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Walsh, Tom; Miranda, Luis
Cc: Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
Subject: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated

Here is revised draft with my edits. Tom, Luis and Ryan, I want to review with you why the speech had to be dramatically edited so we are on the same page going forward. Thanks for everyone's help.

Annotation Summary for: 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated

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 Comment: get our work done

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 Comment: heard

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Marked up using iAnnotate PDF on my iPad