Subject: Re: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
From: <[email-masked]>
To: "Bonosky, Garret" <[email-masked]>
Cc: Tracie Pough <[email-masked]>, "Banfill, Ryan" <[email-masked]>, "Kate Houghton" <[email-masked]>, "Walsh, Tom" <[email-masked]>, "Miranda, Luis" <[email-masked]>, Anita Dunn <[email-masked]>, Hilary Rosen <[email-masked]>, "Guerra, Liana" <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 20 May 2016 12:25:50 -0400

Anita had some edits too but I couldn't see what those were in the attachment she sent. 

DWS

> On May 20, 2016, at 12:24 PM, Bonosky, Garret <[email-masked]> wrote:
> 
> Looping in Liana who has the most recent edited word document. 
> 
> Liana will send to Tom; Tom will edit (with the notes from document attached to this email) and then will send to Kate who will print on the ground on Philadelphia 
> 
> -----Original Message-----
> From: [email-masked] [mailto:[email-masked]] 
> Sent: Friday, May 20, 2016 12:07 PM
> To: Bonosky, Garret; Tracie Pough; Banfill, Ryan; Kate Houghton; Walsh, Tom; Miranda, Luis
> Cc: Anita Dunn; Hilary Rosen
> Subject: Notes for 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
> 
> Here is revised draft with my edits. Tom, Luis and Ryan, I want to review with you why the speech had to be dramatically edited so we are on the same page going forward. Thanks for everyone's help. 
> 
> Annotation Summary for: 5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated
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> Page 2, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 4, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 4, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 4, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: elect a Democrat, once again. 
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> Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 8, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: for whom
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> Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 8, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: it
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> Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 8, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: originally, 
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> Page 8, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 9, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 9, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: happened?
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> Page 9, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 10, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 11, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 12, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 14, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 14, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 14, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: And Hillary declared it a terrorist act yesterday too. 
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> Page 15, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 15, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: gloss over
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> Page 15, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 17, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 20, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 20, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: strengthened our
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> Page 20, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 22, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 22, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: then
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> Page 22, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 22, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 23, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: get our work done
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> Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 23, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: heard
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> Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 23, Typewriter (Red):
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> Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 23, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: the
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> Page 23, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 24, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 24, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 24, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: Dangerous
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> Page 26, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 27, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 27, Typewriter (Red):
>  Comment: of
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> Page 27, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 28, Line Drawing (Red)
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> Page 30, Line Drawing (Red)
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> --
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> Marked up using iAnnotate PDF on my iPad
> 
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> <5.20.16 DWS ASDC Speech tp edits - 1-Annotated.pdf>