Subject: Thesis Comments
From: "Eric Schwerin" <[email-masked]>
To: "Hunter Biden" <[email-masked]>
Date: Sun, 19 Apr 2015 22:19:56 -0400

Not sure if these are helpful to Mike but the main things that jumped
out at me in his conclusion was:

1) He starts off by saying that the fact that mercenaries are made up
of "humans" introduces a sense of uncertainty and the possibility of
rogue actors.  But I don't see why that can't happen in the regular
military. I don't see the support for this conclusion.  It seems to me
like the lack of oversight may be the bigger problem.

2) There are way too many dollar figures (and other currencies)
introduced in the conclusion - it seems to me that those should be in
the body of the thesis not being introduced in the conclusion.

Otherwise it is well researched - think the conclusion just needs to
be tighter.

Eric D. Schwerin
[email-masked]

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