Subject: Re: UPDATED DRAFT: Remarks at Nevada Democratic Party Dinner
From: Amanda Renteria <[email-masked]>
To: Mandy Grunwald <[email-masked]>
Cc: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>, Emmy Ruiz <[email-masked]>, Tim Hogan <[email-masked]>, Speech Drafts <[email-masked]>
Date: Mon, 4 Jan 2016 22:33:23 -0500
List-Id: <speechdrafts.hillaryclinton.com>

The immigration line sounds snarky to me and I'm not sure folks will get
it.

On Mon, Jan 4, 2016 at 6:02 PM, 'Mandy Grunwald' via Speech Drafts <
[email-masked]> wrote:

>
> I like doing the gun contrast.  I would do that instead of "big promises
> we can't keep".  I prefer the specific dig instead of the rhetorical hit.
>
> On your immigration contrast  (I'm glad Sanders now supports immigration
> reform….) -- do you think people will understand the background?  Should we
> be more explicit?  Or will someone background the press?
> On a different topic -- the list of what the GOP will do in the Oval
> Office seems kind of odd.  Are these all executive orders?  I think that
> narrows the list too much of what progress they would rip away.
>
> thanks
> ·
>
>
> *Mandy Grunwald*
> *Grunwald Communications*
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
> To: Emmy Ruiz <[email-masked]>; Tim Hogan <
> [email-masked]>; Speech Drafts <[email-masked]
> >
> Sent: Mon, Jan 4, 2016 3:34 pm
> Subject: Re: UPDATED DRAFT: Remarks at Nevada Democratic Party Dinner
>
> Wanted to flag that she's interested in leaning into Sanders contrast
> here. There's already a few elbows in this draft, including on
> immigration.  That could be enough, but just talked with Jen about the
> possibility of adding another on guns, so floating the bolded addition
> below for discussion:
>
> "I will stand my ground to stop drug companies from price gauging you on
> medicine you need.
>
> "Against polluters, who want to keep poisoning our air and water, and
> threatening our planet’s future.
>
> "Against the gun lobby that blocks every common sense safety reform, even keeping
> guns out of the hands of the mentally ill or suspected terrorists on the
> no-fly list.  If you’re too dangerous to fly, you’re too dangerous to buy
> a gun, period.  *And yes, Senator Sanders, it's a mistake to give gun
> makers and dealers immunity -- they should be help accountable just like
> any other corporation.*
>
> "I also will continue to stand my ground against those who traffic in
> prejudice and paranoia, who spread hate against immigrants, Muslims, LGBT
> Americans, or anyone else they can scapegoat and demonize...."
>
> On Jan 4, 2016, at 11:50 AM, Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
> wrote:
>
> Thanks for the helpful feedback so far.  Here's an updated draft.
>
> On Mon, Jan 4, 2016 at 12:24 AM, Dan Schwerin <
> [email-masked]> wrote:
>
>> On Wednesday, HRC is speaking at the Democratic Party dinner in Nevada,
>> along with the other candidates. She has about 15 minutes. Emmy asked that
>> we emphasize the importance of state party building efforts and electing
>> Dems up and down the ticket, immigration reform, and contrast with local
>> Republicans (as we've done to good effect in Iowa).  This is also an
>> opportunity to lay out the closing argument more robustly than we've doing
>> in town hall toppers so far, raising the stakes in the election by painting
>> a picture of how a Republican President would rip away our progress and
>> explaining why we need to elect someone who has what it takes to get the
>> job done on the economy, security, and problems that keep families up at
>> night.  Plus, starting to draw sharper contrasts with Sanders, as HRC has
>> indicated.  All in 15 minutes!
>> Attached is a draft for discussion. (And please keep in mind that for
>> anything we add, we also need to cut.)
>> Thanks
>> Dan
>>
>
> <2016-01-04 NV dinner - 1230pm ET.docx>
>
>

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