Subject: Re: For the Book: SC Stump outline
From: Amanda Renteria <[email-masked]>
To: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
Cc: Speech Drafts <[email-masked]>, Speech Book <[email-masked]>, Clay Middleton <[email-masked]>, Stephanie Formas <[email-masked]>, Varun Anand <[email-masked]>
Date: Tue, 23 Feb 2016 18:10:20 -0500
List-Id: <speechdrafts.hillaryclinton.com>

On the part with young people.....

And I want to say this to all the young people out there:  I know what
you’re

up against. It’s not enough to make college more affordable, you need help

with the debt you already have – and you need it now.  So we’ll cut your

interest rates and cap payments so you never have to pay more than you can

afford. And I’m proud to be the only candidate in this race with a real
plan to

support historically black colleges and universities.

---- I think this comes off as us telling young people what they need, who
they are, and how she will solve it.  VS.. she has listened to what they
need, she wants to get to know who they are, and she wants to have them
part of the solution.

Perhaps...

And I want to say this to all the young people out there:  I hear you. You
have told me what you’re

up against. You are right - it's not enough to make college more
affordable, you need help

with the debt you already have – and you need it now.

On Tue, Feb 23, 2016 at 5:37 PM, Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
wrote:

> Here's a refreshed stump outline for this week in South Carolina. This is
> meant as a general guide, not as prescriptive for any one event.  We'll
> have issue-specific inserts as needed.
> Thanks
> Dan
>

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