Subject: Re: REVISED DRAFT: Talking points for tonight in Colorado
From: Amanda Renteria <[email-masked]>
To: Megan Rooney <[email-masked]>
Cc: Jennifer Palmieri <[email-masked]>, Joel Benenson <[email-masked]>, Speech Drafts <[email-masked]>
Date: Tue, 4 Aug 2015 08:26:34 -0400
List-Id: <speechdrafts.hillaryclinton.com>

Good here.

Sent from my iPhone

On Aug 4, 2015, at 7:17 AM, Megan Rooney <[email-masked]> wrote:

Good morning all -- here are revised bullets for this evening.  I think
they do everything we discussed.

Three things:

1. At the top, instead of writing out entire riffs that she knows backward
and forward from the stump, we just put in the main tent-pole sentences, to
leave the rest to her.  You'll see.

2.  The "right to rise" immigration hit is different -- take a look.

3.  Added a few sentences on the Voting Rights Act.

HRC is departing earlier than planned this morning so I'll have to send her
a revised version in the next 1.5 hours or so.  So please send me any edits
asap.  (If you miss this window, the event isn't until tonight so we'll
have time for important changes today.)

Thank you all for your invaluable guidance!

On Mon, Aug 3, 2015 at 10:31 PM, Jennifer Palmieri <
[email-masked]> wrote:

> Sorry!  That makes sense.
>
> Sent from my iPhone
>
> On Aug 3, 2015, at 10:31 PM, Megan Rooney <[email-masked]>
> wrote:
>
> I think Joel's saying that we shouldn't have her saying "I believe in a
> right to rise..." which is what I have now.  I'm changing it so she's not
> endorsing that idea.  Joel let me know if I misunderstood you.
>
> On Mon, Aug 3, 2015 at 10:29 PM, Jennifer Palmieri <
> [email-masked]> wrote:
>
>> Hm...,pretty sure we talked on the call with HRC today specifically
>> about using "right to rise" formulation to hit Jeb on immigration.
>> Thought you and I discussed separately, too.  Maybe not.  At any rate,
>> it is the only way we make any news for the rest of the week.  If
>> folks have another formulation to hit Jeb on immigration that break
>> through, that is great.  Otherwise I think we stick with right to
>> rise.
>>
>> Sent from my iPhone
>>
>> > On Aug 3, 2015, at 9:35 PM, Joel Benenson <[email-masked]> wrote:
>> >
>> > Megan,
>> > I'm not sure about co opting right to rise.. Our mantra is get ahead
>> and stay ahead and I don't thing we should confuse it but taking Jeb's
>> language.
>> >
>> > Sent from my iPad
>> >
>> >> On Aug 3, 2015, at 6:16 PM, Megan Rooney <[email-masked]>
>> wrote:
>> >>
>> >> Hi everyone --
>> >>
>> >> Attached are talking points for tomorrow night's organizing meeting in
>> Colorado.
>> >>
>> >> After big talk from me about trying to keep this to one page, I've
>> failed -- it's 2.5 pages.  I'm looking for cuts!
>> >>
>> >> This includes a "right to rise" immigration hit -- it's bolded.
>> >>
>> >> I'll be sending this to the book in 15 minutes so if anyone sees
>> things that need fixing right now, let me know...
>> >>
>> >> Thanks!
>> >> <2015-08-03 CO stump talking points 6pm.docx>
>>
>
>
<2015-08-04 CO stump talking points 7am.docx>