Subject: Re: REVISED DRAFT: tonight's dinner in MN
From: Corey Ciorciari <[email-masked]>
To: Megan Rooney <[email-masked]>
Cc: Alexandra Fetissoff <[email-masked]>, Scott Hogan <[email-masked]>, Speech Drafts <[email-masked]>, Speech Book <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 12 Feb 2016 14:25:41 -0500
List-Id: <speechdrafts.hillaryclinton.com>

Re today's announcement, would change this:

"We need to create more jobs for young people, because being out of work at
the start of your career can have lifelong repercussions – and today I
shared my plan to create jobs for more than 36,000 unemployed young people
here in Minnesota."

To this:

"We need to create more jobs for young people, because being out of work at
the start of your career can have lifelong repercussions – and today I
shared my plan *that could help* create jobs for *the more than* 36,000
unemployed young people here in Minnesota."

On Fri, Feb 12, 2016 at 2:01 PM, Megan Rooney <[email-masked]>
wrote:

> Latest attached.
>
> On Fri, Feb 12, 2016 at 2:00 PM, Alexandra Fetissoff <
> [email-masked]> wrote:
>
>> Can someone attach the draft? Thanks!
>>
>> On Fri, Feb 12, 2016 at 12:22 PM, Scott Hogan <[email-masked]>
>> wrote:
>>
>>> + AF
>>>
>>> Sent from my iPhone
>>>
>>> > On Feb 12, 2016, at 12:20 PM, Megan Rooney <[email-masked]>
>>> wrote:
>>> >
>>> > Hi all --
>>> >
>>> > Here's the latest draft for tonight's dinner.  It includes edits from
>>> Mandy, some reordering by Jake, and more local color.  This is with the
>>> Secretary now and she's cautioned us against making this longer, so if you
>>> have additional edits, please keep that in mind.
>>> >
>>> > Thanks!
>>> > <2016-02-12 MN democratic party dinner 115pm.docx>
>>>
>>
>>
>>
>> --
>> Alexandra Fogolin Fetissoff
>> 908-456-7070
>>
>
>

-- 
Corey Ciorciari
Policy Department
Hillary for America
@CoreyCiorciari

On Fri, Feb 12, 2016 at 2:01 PM, Megan Rooney <[email-masked]>
wrote:

> Latest attached.
>
> On Fri, Feb 12, 2016 at 2:00 PM, Alexandra Fetissoff <
> [email-masked]> wrote:
>
>> Can someone attach the draft? Thanks!
>>
>> On Fri, Feb 12, 2016 at 12:22 PM, Scott Hogan <[email-masked]>
>> wrote:
>>
>>> + AF
>>>
>>> Sent from my iPhone
>>>
>>> > On Feb 12, 2016, at 12:20 PM, Megan Rooney <[email-masked]>
>>> wrote:
>>> >
>>> > Hi all --
>>> >
>>> > Here's the latest draft for tonight's dinner.  It includes edits from
>>> Mandy, some reordering by Jake, and more local color.  This is with the
>>> Secretary now and she's cautioned us against making this longer, so if you
>>> have additional edits, please keep that in mind.
>>> >
>>> > Thanks!
>>> > <2016-02-12 MN democratic party dinner 115pm.docx>
>>>
>>
>>
>>
>> --
>> Alexandra Fogolin Fetissoff
>> 908-456-7070
>>
>
>

-- 
Corey Ciorciari
Policy Department
Hillary for America
@CoreyCiorciari