Subject: Re: DRAFT: Opening Statement
From: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
To: Mandy Grunwald <[email-masked]>, Jennifer Palmieri <[email-masked]>, "Kendall, David" <[email-masked]>, Jake Sullivan <[email-masked]>, John Podesta <[email-masked]>, Adrienne Elrod <[email-masked]>, Philippe Reines <[email-masked]>, Sara Latham <[email-masked]>, Cheryl Mills <[email-masked]>, Heather Samuelson <[email-masked]>, "Turner, Katherine" <[email-masked]>, Brian Fallon <[email-masked]>, Huma Abedin <[email-masked]>, Phil Schiliro <[email-masked]>, Phil Barnett <pbarnett
Date: Fri, 16 Oct 2015 19:42:38 -0400

Here are some modest revisions. Am going to send this over to HRC so she
can start thinking about it as well.
Thanks all.
Dan

On Fri, Oct 16, 2015 at 7:00 PM, Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
wrote:

> That "backs of dead Americans" line is stolen from Hard Choices, so maybe
> a good idea to tweak slightly anyhow. I'll play with some alternatives.  If
> folks have other concerns before I send on to HRC, please let me know.
>
> On Fri, Oct 16, 2015 at 6:13 PM, Mandy Grunwald <[email-masked]> wrote:
>
>> I also think it's strong.
>>
>> I don't mind the "backs of dead Americans" because we need a bit of moral
>> outrage.
>>
>> I suppose we can dial the language back, but the sense of outrage should
>> remain.
>>
>> *Mandy Grunwald*
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>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: Jennifer Palmieri <[email-masked]>
>> To: Kendall, David <[email-masked]>
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>> [email-masked]>; Brian Fallon <[email-masked]>; Huma Abedin <
>> [email-masked]>; Phil Schiliro <[email-masked]>; Phil
>> Barnett <[email-masked]>; Matt Siegler <[email-masked]>
>> Sent: Fri, Oct 16, 2015 6:04 pm
>> Subject: Re: DRAFT: Opening Statement
>>
>> I think it is good.  Imagine the clip they will use is the partisan
>> slugfest sentence.  I don't love "backs of dead Americans" in that
>> sentence.  I think that is too graphic and splashes back on her as
>> appearing to exploit their deaths.
>>
>> Sent from my iPhone
>>
>> On Oct 16, 2015, at 3:40 PM, Kendall, David <[email-masked]> wrote:
>>
>> I like it.  Just two thoughts.
>>
>> We twice call the ARB “independent”—I’d prefer to call it “non-partisan”
>> as we do once in the draft.  *Hard Choices* did not call it
>> “independent”, and since it’s appointed by and responsible to the
>> Secretary, I think we open an avenue of attack by calling it “independent”.
>>
>> Can we get some more numbers into the early “diplomacy is dangerous”
>> discussion?  Sixty-six American diplomatic personnel and over a hundred
>> contractors and locally employed staff killed since the 1970’s (or whatever
>> the numbers are).  I recognize we have some numbers on page 3 (Beirut
>> bombing, 1998 attacks).
>>
>>
>> *David E. Kendall*
>> *Williams & Connolly LLP*
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>>
>> *From:* Dan Schwerin [mailto:[email-masked]
>> <[email-masked]>]
>> *Sent:* Friday, October 16, 2015 2:31 PM
>> *To:* Jake Sullivan; John Podesta; Adrienne Elrod; Mandy Grunwald;
>> Philippe Reines; Sara Latham; Cheryl Mills; Heather Samuelson; Kendall,
>> David; Turner, Katherine; Brian Fallon; Jennifer Palmieri; Huma Abedin;
>> Phil Schiliro; Phil Barnett; Matt Siegler
>> *Subject:* DRAFT: Opening Statement
>>
>> Here is a draft of HRC's opening statement based on our discussion
>> today.  As Cheryl mentioned, we'd love to get this to HRC for a first read
>> tonight or tomorrow, so quick feedback would be great.
>> Thanks
>> Dan
>>
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