Subject: The Stump
From: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
To: Jennifer Palmieri <[email-masked]>, Jake Sullivan <[email-masked]>, Megan Rooney <[email-masked]>, Robby Mook <[email-masked]>, John Podesta <[email-masked]>
Date: Sun, 20 Dec 2015 15:45:40 -0500

After our group conversation the other day with HRC about the stump, I had
a chance to watch her deliver it in Minnesota, Nebraska, and Iowa. The good
news is that she's definitely in a groove, delivering strong lines with
passion and few or no notes, and getting good reaction from the crowds.
She's a much more compelling candidate in these events than she was a few
months ago and people seem to be responding with a lot more energy and
enthusiasm, especially in March states where they haven't seen her as
much.  The less good news is that, as we discussed, her sump still lacks
structure or an overarching argument (and she agrees with that).  I
suggested to HRC that, rather than write her a new speech, it might be more
useful to annotate a recent transcript and provide feedback on what's
working and what could be improved.  She was open to that idea.  So I'm
attaching my notes on her Omaha stump, and would welcome edits and
additions from this group before I send it forward.  I think I'll include a
cover memo underscoring the notes about raising the stakes, needing a
president who can both keep us safe and grow our economy, and doing more
signposting in the speech to provide some structure.
 Let me know what you think.
Thanks
Dan