Subject: Re: FOR THE BOOK: PP endorsement remarks
From: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
To: Lauren Peterson <[email-masked]>
Cc: Mini Timmaraju <[email-masked]>, Rachel Vogelstein <[email-masked]>, Jennifer Klein <[email-masked]>, Emily Aden <[email-masked]>, Ashley Woolheater <[email-masked]>, Mike Vlacich <[email-masked]>, Harrell Kirstein <[email-masked]>, Kari Thurman <[email-masked]>, Julie McClain <[email-masked]>, Maya Harris <[email-masked]>, Speech Drafts <[email-masked]>, Speech Book <[email-masked]>
Date: Sat, 9 Jan 2016 20:52:24 -0500
List-Id: <speechdrafts.hillaryclinton.com>

Thanks Lauren! A couple more edits on this.
Dan

On Sat, Jan 9, 2016 at 5:56 PM, Lauren Peterson <
[email-masked]> wrote:

> Thanks, everyone!
>
> Updated remarks attached here. These are ready for the book.
>
> On Sat, Jan 9, 2016 at 5:05 PM, Mini Timmaraju <
> [email-masked]> wrote:
>
>> Lauren great work! This version is great and hits a lot of great notes
>> that will make a big impact on the PP audience and beyond with our women
>> supporters.
>>
>> Sent from my iPhone
>>
>> On Jan 9, 2016, at 4:58 PM, Rachel Vogelstein <[email-masked]> wrote:
>>
>> This looks good.  We should keep the line on CEOs out because it's
>> inaccurate to point to CEOs, given the language of the *Hobby Lobby *holding
>> and the Administration's recently issued definition of closely held
>> for-profit companies.  Better to refer to "employers" or "bosses."  The
>> revision included here is great.
>>
>> On Sat, Jan 9, 2016 at 3:42 PM, Lauren Peterson <
>> [email-masked]> wrote:
>>
>>> Thanks, everyone!
>>>
>>> I dropped in a line from a past speech on Hobby Lobby because this one
>>> seemed a little clunky with edits.
>>>
>>> Here's an updated version with these edits.
>>>
>>> Let me know your thoughts in the next hour or so!
>>>
>>> On Sat, Jan 9, 2016 at 2:13 PM, Jennifer Klein <[email-masked]>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>>> A few responses to Emily and additional comments.
>>>>
>>>> Thanks,
>>>> Jen
>>>>
>>>> From: Emily Aden <[email-masked]>
>>>> Date: Saturday, January 9, 2016 at 1:14 PM
>>>> To: Ashley Woolheater <[email-masked]>
>>>> Cc: Lauren Peterson <[email-masked]>, Speech Drafts <
>>>> [email-masked]>, Mini Timmaraju <
>>>> [email-masked]>, Jennifer Klein <[email-masked]>,
>>>> Rachel Vogelstein <[email-masked]>, Mike Vlacich <
>>>> [email-masked]>, Harrell Kirstein <
>>>> [email-masked]>, Kari Thurman <
>>>> [email-masked]>, Julie McClain <
>>>> [email-masked]>, Maya Harris <[email-masked]>
>>>> Subject: Re: DRAFT: PP Endorsement Remarks
>>>>
>>>> Research edits attached in comments
>>>>
>>>> On Sat, Jan 9, 2016 at 12:54 PM, Ashley Woolheater <
>>>> [email-masked]> wrote:
>>>>
>>>>> + Maya
>>>>>
>>>>> Ashley Woolheater
>>>>> Policy Department
>>>>> Hillary for America
>>>>>
>>>>> On Sat, Jan 9, 2016 at 12:49 PM, Lauren Peterson <
>>>>> [email-masked]> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>>> Hi everyone!
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Attached is a draft of the remarks for the Planned Parenthood
>>>>>> endorsement meeting. Thanks to everyone who has weighed in so far.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> If everyone can send edits by 430 pm, that would be delightful.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Thank you!!
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Lauren
>>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>
>>>
>>
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