Subject: Re: DRAFT: Immigration / CAR oped
From: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
To: Amanda Renteria <[email-masked]>
Cc: Kristina Costa <[email-masked]>, Speech Drafts <[email-masked]>, Andrea Flores <[email-masked]>, Jorge Silva <[email-masked]>, Xochitl Hinojosa <[email-masked]>, Maya Harris <[email-masked]>, Lorella Praeli <[email-masked]>, Marlon Marshall <[email-masked]>, Corey Ciorciari <[email-masked]>, Tim Hogan <[email-masked]>, Emmy Ruiz <[email-masked]>, Betsaida Alcantara <[email-masked]>, Sara Solow <[email-masked]>
Date: Thu, 18 Feb 2016 00:41:07 -0500
List-Id: <speechdrafts.hillaryclinton.com>

Yes, I think that's what we should do.

On Thu, Feb 18, 2016 at 12:40 AM, Amanda Renteria <
[email-masked]> wrote:

> What about cutting first paragraph
> and changing the open to....
>
> Our immigration system is broken and too many families have been torn
> apart as a result.
>
> On Thu, Feb 18, 2016 at 12:33 AM, Amanda Renteria <
> [email-masked]> wrote:
>
>> I think it;s too much of a shot.
>>
>> On Thu, Feb 18, 2016 at 12:19 AM, Dan Schwerin <
>> [email-masked]> wrote:
>>
>>> Hi all, we've reworked this op-ed a bit so sending back around for a
>>> final look. In particular, want to gut check that this (especially the
>>> first graph) isn't too much of a shot at the administration. And sorry to
>>> say, but time is short on this, so would appreciate feedback as quickly as
>>> possible.
>>> Thanks
>>> Dan
>>>
>>
>>
>>
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>
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> Amanda Renteria
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