Subject: Re: For Review: HRC @ Steak Fry
From: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
To: Robert Mook <[email-masked]>, Philippe Reines <[email-masked]>, Huma Abedin <[email-masked]>, Cheryl Mills <[email-masked]>, Ethan Gelber <[email-masked]>, John Podesta <[email-masked]>, Jake Sullivan <[email-masked]>, Nick Merrill <[email-masked]>
Date: Sat, 13 Sep 2014 20:42:35 +0000

HRC still isn’t exactly sold on the speech. Is concerned its neither fish
nor fowl, neither a rah-rah partisan call to arms nor a really personal
narrative. Her answer is to be more direct up front about why she’s there
and why she isn’t. Say explicitly that she has a big decision to make and
if she decides to move forward, then she’ll be back with a lot more to say
about where we should take the country. But for now, she’s here for Tom
and Ruth and these candidates. Also more joking about the grandchild and
how she’s waiting with baited breath.

I’m revising now.

On 9/12/14, 3:03 AM, "Dan Schwerin" <[email-masked]> wrote:

>Revised to reflect everyone¹s feedback, plus shortened to get us down to
>around 15 minutes. Teresa V and Lorraine V both have reviewed for Iowa
>sensibilities. I asked Vietor and Favreau to read it from an Obama
>perspective. Think we¹re getting pretty close here.
>
>
>On 9/11/14, 9:56 AM, "Robert Mook" <[email-masked]> wrote:
>
>>Kudos, Dan.  This is shaping up really nicely.
>>
>>On Wed, Sep 10, 2014 at 8:48 PM, Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
>>wrote:
>>> All, here¹s the latest draft of the steak fry remarks.  It¹s a speech
>>>about
>>> what spurs us into public service.  Please send me any comments or
>>> suggestions (especially for cuts).
>>> Thanks
>>> Dan
>