Subject: Re: Launch Speech Outline
From: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
To: John Podesta <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 6 May 2015 12:33:45 -0400

I think the gender question is a big one that needs to be hashed out. I was
in the minority here yesterday in arguing that she should address the
"first woman president" thing directly in the speech in some way. And
related to your question of "could a man deliver this speech?" I think its
also worth asking "could any other Democrat deliver this speech?"  Because
if the answer is yes, then we need to find more ways to personalize and
differentiate.

On Wed, May 6, 2015 at 7:18 AM, John Podesta <[email-masked]> wrote:

> Dan,
> Three things:
> 1) I think she'll have to be a little more expansive in the economy
> section on what she'll do. Big hunger not for white papers, but for some
> more meat there, so I think we need a little room there. I am also getting
> climate change questions a lot on the road (granted I have been to Denver
> Boulder and Palo Alto) but I think we need a short riff in building the
> economy of tomorrow on innovation, infrastructure, energy transformation
> and climate change.
> 2) given what she did on immigration, might need a bit there so as not to
> look like Vegas was a one off pander.
> 3) more of a question, could this speech sans the NASA reference be given
> by a man, and if so, is that what we want?
> John
>
> On Tuesday, May 5, 2015, Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
> wrote:
>
>> Here's what went to her so everyone has it.
>>
>> On Tue, May 5, 2015 at 10:01 PM, Margolis, Jim <[email-masked]>
>> wrote:
>>
>>>  Ty
>>>
>>> Jim Margolis
>>> Sent from my iPhone.
>>> Please excuse typos.
>>>
>>> On May 5, 2015, at 6:50 PM, Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>>   Thanks all.
>>> And Jim, I can punch up the "It's Your Time" before sending. It's in
>>> here but not prominently.
>>> Dan
>>>
>>> On Tue, May 5, 2015 at 9:49 PM, Joel Benenson <[email-masked]>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>>>  I’m in the same place on this.  Let’s send; tell her it’s a work in
>>>> progress and we know we have more work to do.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> Let’s get some comments back but if not, let’s work on it tomorrow at HQ
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> *From:* Mandy Grunwald [mailto:[email-masked]]
>>>> *Sent:* Tuesday, May 05, 2015 9:19 PM
>>>> *To:* [email-masked]; Joel Benenson; Jim Margolis; John
>>>> Anzalone; [email-masked]; [email-masked];
>>>> [email-masked]; [email-masked];
>>>> [email-masked]; [email-masked];
>>>> [email-masked]
>>>> *Cc:* Shannon Currie
>>>> *Subject:* Re: Launch Speech Outline
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> Dan,
>>>>
>>>> I think this is much improved.
>>>>
>>>> It's still not quite there but I am fine sending this to HRC like this.
>>>>
>>>> It's a good basis for conversation.
>>>>
>>>> thx
>>>>
>>>> mandy
>>>>
>>>> *Mandy Grunwald*
>>>>
>>>> *Grunwald Communications*
>>>>
>>>> *202 973-9400 <202%20973-9400>*
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> -----Original Message-----
>>>> From: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
>>>> To: Joel Benenson <[email-masked]>; Mandy Grunwald <
>>>> [email-masked]>; Jim <[email-masked]>; John Anzalone <
>>>> [email-masked]>; David Binder <[email-masked]>; Huma
>>>> Abedin <[email-masked]>; Robby Mook <[email-masked]>;
>>>> John Podesta <[email-masked]>; Jake Sullivan <
>>>> [email-masked]>; Kristina Schake <
>>>> [email-masked]>; Jennifer Palmieri <
>>>> [email-masked]>
>>>> Cc: Shannon Currie <[email-masked]>
>>>> Sent: Tue, May 5, 2015 9:09 pm
>>>> Subject: Launch Speech Outline
>>>>
>>>> Team, as promised, here is a revised draft outline for the launch
>>>> speech. This was a quick revision obviously, but hopefully you'll find it
>>>> reflects the main thrust of our discussion.  Please send any final edits or
>>>> suggestions by 10pm.  Then we'll send on to HRC so she can begin thinking
>>>> about it with us.  And of course this is just the beginning of what I hope
>>>> will be a highly collaborative process.
>>>>
>>>> Thanks
>>>>
>>>> Dan
>>>>
>>>
>>>
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