Subject: Re: REVISE HOME BASE TALKING POINTS FOR HRC
From: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
To: "Margolis, Jim" <[email-masked]>
Cc: Jake Sullivan <[email-masked]>, John Podesta <[email-masked]>, Mandy Grunwald <[email-masked]>, "[email-masked]" <[email-masked]>, "[email-masked]" <[email-masked]>, "[email-masked]" <[email-masked]>, "[email-masked]" <[email-masked]>, "[email-masked]" <[email-masked]>
Date: Sun, 17 May 2015 13:19:25 -0400

Here's how this would look at the organizing event on Monday, with the
suggested changes and then some points from Marlon at the end.

On Sun, May 17, 2015 at 1:10 PM, Margolis, Jim <[email-masked]>
wrote:

>  good catch jake
>  ------------------------------
> *From:* Jake Sullivan [[email-masked]]
> *Sent:* Sunday, May 17, 2015 1:00 PM
> *To:* John Podesta
> *Cc:* Dan Schwerin; Mandy Grunwald; [email-masked];
> [email-masked]; [email-masked]; [email-masked];
> Margolis, Jim; [email-masked]
> *Subject:* Re: REVISE HOME BASE TALKING POINTS FOR HRC
>
>   Would add a sentence on standing up for our allies and our values,
> including Israel and other fellow democracies, and confronting terrorists
> and dictators with strength and cunning.
>
>
>
> On May 17, 2015, at 12:12 PM, John Podesta <[email-masked]> wrote:
>
>  3 small suggestions:
> 1) if we are going to talk about building the economy for tomorrow, we
> should work in the the words innovation and sustainable someplace. Both are
> dog whistle words.
> 2) more people are working more jobs is ambiguous and subject to different
> meaning.  Do we mean more people are working two or more jobs?
> 3) I've tried this one before but in the democracy fight, I still think
> it's stronger to say "I'll appoint Supreme Court Justices who will protect
> the the right to vote and not the right of a few billionaires to buy
> elections."  Bernie has now linked Citizens United to Court appointments
> which may make this more or less desirable.
>
> On Sunday, May 17, 2015, Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
> wrote:
>
>>  I think it's very nice
>>
>>
>>
>> On May 17, 2015, at 11:32 AM, Mandyt Grunwald <[email-masked]
>> <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>> wrote:
>>
>>  Attached is a draft of the Home Base intro talking points, using some
>> of HRC's new language.
>>
>>  This reflects Joel's edits too.
>>
>>  Please let me know what you think.
>>
>>  If people are happy with this, please get to HRC.
>>
>>  thx
>>
>> *Mandy Grunwald*
>> *Grunwald Communications*
>> *202 973-9400 <202%20973-9400>*
>>
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: Robby Mook <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>
>> To: Mandy Grunwald <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>
>> Cc: Huma Abedin <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>;
>> Kristina Schake <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>;
>> Dan Schwerin <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>;
>> Joel Benenson <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>;
>> Margolis, Jim <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>;
>> John Anzalone <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>; David
>> Binder <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>; Jennifer
>> Palmieri <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>;
>> Jake Sullivan <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>;
>> John Podesta <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>; Jon
>> Favreau <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>; Lissa
>> Muscatine <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>
>> Sent: Sat, May 16, 2015 5:15 pm
>> Subject: Re: Launch speech draft
>>
>>  Yes--that's my understanding.
>>
>> On Sat, May 16, 2015 at 5:14 PM, Mandy Grunwald <[email-masked]
>> <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>> wrote:
>>
>>>
>>>  And just to be clear -- she is looking for a tighter version of the
>>> opening she has been doing at events/fundraisers -- that is still Four
>>> Fights -- but reflects some of her favorite new additions (like mental
>>> health)-- without being a laundry list.
>>>
>>>  Is that correct?
>>>
>>>  *Mandy Grunwald*
>>> *Grunwald Communications*
>>> *202 973-9400 <202%20973-9400>*
>>>
>>>
>>>  -----Original Message-----
>>> From: Huma Abedin <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>
>>> >
>>> To: Robby Mook <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>
>>> Cc: Mandy Grunwald <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>;
>>> Kristina Schake <[email-masked]
>>> <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>; Dan Schwerin <
>>> [email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>; Joel
>>> Benenson <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>; Jim <
>>> [email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>; John Anzalone <
>>> [email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>; David Binder <
>>> [email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>; Jennifer Palmieri
>>> <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>; Jake
>>> Sullivan <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>;
>>> John Podesta <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>;
>>> Jon Favreau <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>;
>>> Lissa Muscatine <[email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>>
>>> Sent: Sat, May 16, 2015 5:10 pm
>>> Subject: Re: Launch speech draft
>>>
>>>    Yes that would be ideal. This way she will have tomorrow
>>> afternoon/evening to review and can give feedback by Monday am.
>>>
>>> Sent from my iPhone
>>>
>>> On May 16, 2015, at 4:30 PM, Robby Mook < [email-masked]
>>> <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>> wrote:
>>>
>>>   Since it sounds like we won't have the paragraphs until later today
>>> and since we need the new home base by mid day tomorrow, I think we should
>>> just move forward with a revised home base using what we have right
>>> now--essentially refining the core message and four fights.  I appreciate
>>> trying to start to pivot to where we want to go with the speech, but my
>>> larger concern is that she have sufficient time with the material.
>>>
>>> On Sat, May 16, 2015 at 1:27 PM, Mandy Grunwald <[email-masked]
>>> <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>> wrote:
>>>
>>>> I was hoping to see new speech paragraphs, so we could align the home
>>>> base language with new announce language.
>>>>
>>>> Mandy Grunwald
>>>> Grunwald Communications
>>>> 202 973-9400
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> > On May 16, 2015, at 1:05 PM, Kristina Schake <
>>>> [email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>> wrote:
>>>> >
>>>> > Huma, you mean the home base language for her message events and
>>>> > fundraisers until the launch? Basically the topper for every event
>>>> > that hits our core message before adding the issue of that day. Mandy
>>>> > is helping us write that.  Mandy I know we asked you for a lot this
>>>> > weekend. Possible to do by noon tomorrow?
>>>> >
>>>> >
>>>> > Sent from my iPhone
>>>> >
>>>> >> On May 16, 2015, at 12:42 PM, Huma Abedin < [email-masked]
>>>> <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>> wrote:
>>>> >>
>>>> >> Where are you guys on home base language? Can we get by 12pm
>>>> tomorrow?
>>>> >>
>>>> >> Sent from my iPhone
>>>> >>
>>>> >>> On May 14, 2015, at 4:35 PM, Dan Schwerin <
>>>> [email-masked] <http://UrlBlockedError.aspx>> wrote:
>>>> >>>
>>>> >>> Team, here is a first draft of the Launch Speech. Thanks to Lissa
>>>> Muscatine and Jon Favreau for great work on this, and to Joel for his
>>>> advice.
>>>> >>>
>>>> >>> This rough draft is very much a work in progress and there are a
>>>> number of questions to consider as you read.
>>>> >>>
>>>> >>> -- At this stage, we're most concerned with structure and themes.
>>>> In general, it would be great if you could focus for now on those issues
>>>> rather than specific language.
>>>> >>> -- You'll see that "It's Your Time" is not in here yet. Jon and
>>>> Lissa, with fresh eyes, both raised concerns that this wouldn't work well
>>>> here, if at all.  Joel also has concerns. So that's worth discussing.
>>>> >>> -- "The Vision Thing."  This remains a challenge. As you read, does
>>>> it feel like a vision for the future comes through? If not, that's a place
>>>> we really need to focus.
>>>> >>> -- The Four Fights.  I think nobody really loves the Four Fights
>>>> but we haven't come up with a better frame for her policy agenda. If
>>>> there's a great alternative, we should sell her on it.  If not, we should
>>>> try to make sure the Four Fights feels coherent and big enough to carry the
>>>> agenda and stand up to the echo of Roosevelt's Four Freedoms.
>>>> >>> -- This is too long, so suggested cuts would be very welcome.
>>>> >>>
>>>> >>> We have committed to give HRC a draft to read over the weekend, but
>>>> then we have several weeks to get this right.  So it would be great for
>>>> folks to send me thoughts and reactions via email tonight or tomorrow
>>>> morning. And then we can look forward to more in depth conversations down
>>>> the road.
>>>> >>>
>>>> >>> Thanks very much.
>>>> >>> Dan
>>>> >>> <2015-05-14 Launch Speech - 4pm.docx>
>>>>
>>>
>>>
>>     <HRC Home Base Intro 5-17.docx>
>>
>>
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