Subject: Re: Jeff Shesol
From: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
To: Robby Mook <[email-masked]>
Cc: Jennifer Palmieri <[email-masked]>, John Podesta <[email-masked]>, Kristina Schake <[email-masked]>
Date: Thu, 11 Jun 2015 00:17:15 -0400

I think she's not married to the word and its worth discussing.  Anzo keeps
making the case for fights because he says its a lot more memorable than
the other options. But its clearly off-putting to plenty of readers.

On Thu, Jun 11, 2015 at 12:12 AM, Robby Mook <[email-masked]>
wrote:

> She seemed to shy away from fights at our meeting.  I'd much prefer
> "tests", "challenges" or something else but feels late to litigate.  Not
> sure if she had different thinking today, though.
>
> On Thu, Jun 11, 2015 at 12:08 AM, Dan Schwerin <
> [email-masked]> wrote:
>
>> I asked Jeff Shesol at West Wing Writers, who I like and trust, to give
>> the latest draft a read, plus the 6/8 version with the nurse.  Here's his
>> take on where we are:
>>
>> "This is terrific. Really terrific! A big step up from the last version. It
>> shows she's got energy for the fight; she's got ideas; she's got a breadth
>> of vision; and she's someone who really understands (and can speak for and
>> speak to) the aspirations of everyday Americans. I think you're really
>> close to a finished product here."
>>
>> His one big concern is that he thinks our four buckets should be
>> called something other than fights.
>>
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