Subject: Fwd: Wing Ding
From: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
To: John Podesta <[email-masked]>, Jake Sullivan <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 14 Aug 2015 11:05:35 -0400

Joel's comments on Iran
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From: Joel Benenson <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, Aug 14, 2015 at 10:58 AM
Subject: RE: Wing Ding
To: Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>

I’m on a plane and m first flight had spotty wifi.

I don’t know what others comments are but you can read just the tracked
changes in Iran section and decide with her which she likes.   I don’t
think the “hard choices” reference works but I’ll leave that to you.  It’s
the title of her book and while this may be one of them I would rather she
just sound definitive about what she’s saying on this rather than defining
what leadership is about.  I think the point of her comments has to come
through. Maybe I’m overthinking but it just doesn’t hit me right.

For what it’s worth, I hate the yelling/screaming/trump graph.  It sounds
completely contrived and doesn’t deliver a big joke or a big point.

I realize I’m out of town given that I’m on a plane. So I won’t weigh in on
anything else. Obviously didn’t have much of chance given I had to travel
starting at 5 AM

Joel

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*Sent:* Friday, August 14, 2015 2:25 AM
*To:* Speech Drafts
*Subject:* Re: Wing Ding

Sharing my latest Wing Ding draft. I'm planning on making a few tweaks to
the Iran section and looking to cut several hundred words, which I don't
think will be tough. On first blush, HRC is liking this more than before,
but we'll see.

Thanks

Dan

On Thu, Aug 13, 2015 at 4:20 PM, Dan Schwerin <[email-masked]>
wrote:

Latest Wing Ding is attached.